30 replies to this topic

[bareblar03]

As you all know I'm pretty much the most hardened thug since Tupac and Biggie

jks

but for real, I'm trying to learn to freestyle better, I made a diss track for this girl on FB who told me earlier she got fired from her job because she was tending to a girl that burned her hand and someone stole gas lol, so I used it as a line

then I stopped when I realized I was about to freestyle about masturbation

https://soundcloud.c.../introbeat2free

thoughts pls

Edit: I also recorded a written one today, it's much better because it's actually thought out rather than freestyled. Give it a listen and let me know what you think

https://soundcloud.com/user503516/ms6

I realized over the past few days that I'm not actually an atheist like I thought I was my whole life, I believe that there is a God, I just don't think any religion will help you find him - you have to do that yourself. This rap was supposed to be basically a letter addressed to God asking "Why do we die"

Edited by bareblar03, 08 March 2013 - 03:07 PM.

[treeqt]

sucked badly

Spoiler

didnt even listen

Spoiler

still sucks though

[Brian_Emo]

please tell me this is some sort of joke

[bareblar03]

fuck
















harsh



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[Bigqtx]

Besht beat evar, holy fuck

I rap too, so yah

[bareblar03]

I tried to make a recorded song, the lyrics are fairly intricate and it's heavily religiously charged

This is the result of about 15 minutes work including writing recording and the little editing that Audacity allows

https://soundcloud.com/user503516/ms6

Please give any thoughts or criticism, I'd like to improve

[Beny0]

dope
a

[stcolbert]

deja vu?

[bareblar03]

stcolbert, on 07 March 2013 - 11:31 PM, said:

deja vu?

to what?

also with my voice would it be better to say less and flow better or say more and flow like I do?

I chose really complicated rhyme schemes because I was most worried about making the lines say exactly what I wanted to say, I'm not sure if that is a good or bad thing since I hardly have a voice for rap but I love music. I think rap is a good way to participate in that so any help would be appreciated to help me improve

also I know it's shitty quality right now but if it had better quality and better editing do you think it could sound reasonably good?

Edited by bareblar03, 08 March 2013 - 05:30 AM.

[foxurbox]

I don't even care if this isn't you, you're just as gigantic a faggot as the guy making this shit.


EDIT: I can edit my own post too, mod.


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[Thedream]

lol? weirdo above me

[bareblar03]

foxurbox, on 08 March 2013 - 07:30 AM, said:

I don't even care if this isn't you, you're just as gigantic a faggot as the guy making this shit.


EDIT: I can edit my own post too, mod.

????

like seriously, what are you even saying

http://www.arenajunk...36036-foxurbox/

so negative lol, I vote ban






even moreso than vael, that is saying something

Edited by bareblar03, 08 March 2013 - 07:47 AM.

[Thedream]

foxurbox, on 08 March 2013 - 07:30 AM, said:

EDIT: I can edit my own post too, mod.

http://vocaroo.com/i/s0I5wwtykxB9

[Thedream]

lmfao???

[foxurbox]

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…………..„-* : : :„„--/ : : : : : : : '\
…………./ : : „-* . .| : : : : : : : : '|
……….../ : „-* . . . | : : : : : : : : |
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[stcolbert]

bareblar03, on 08 March 2013 - 05:13 AM, said:

to what?

also with my voice would it be better to say less and flow better or say more and flow like I do?

I chose really complicated rhyme schemes because I was most worried about making the lines say exactly what I wanted to say, I'm not sure if that is a good or bad thing since I hardly have a voice for rap but I love music. I think rap is a good way to participate in that so any help would be appreciated to help me improve

also I know it's shitty quality right now but if it had better quality and better editing do you think it could sound reasonably good?

Shirouds

[bareblar03]

stcolbert, on 08 March 2013 - 10:55 AM, said:

Shirouds

no gay pics though so at least I have that going for me

true though

[stcolbert]

bareblar03, on 08 March 2013 - 02:19 PM, said:

no gay pics though so at least I have that going for me

true though

You also probably don't look like a member of hezbollah, which is always a plus.

[Thedream]

stcolbert, on 08 March 2013 - 08:36 PM, said:

You also probably don't look like a member of hezbollah, which is always a plus.

repped for using hezbollah instead of al qaeda